WITNESS.demo (Canceled)

I'm sad, but thanks for letting us know! (I hope you change your mind someday, because I really liked this demo.)

Welp, that's shitty. But for some reason, I was expecting this since this happens a lot. 

Noooo, I'm so sad there isn't more to read through! I've been writing novels about witness protection kind of stories and this- this could be a whole BOOK if you wrote it out! You'd get a lot of money if you got it published!

I really like this story/concept! I see it's been over a year since you updated it. Just curious, are you planning on continuing this? It has so much promise!

My. God. This Twine story surpassed my expectations ten-fold. 

I do have a few suggestions though:

•  A correct way of identifying the suspect to get a "good" ending. 
• When players customise their name, provide a list of character names used in your story so that players don't bump into someone with the same name.
• Include a points system to keep track of the case progress (selecting correct answers gets the "good" ending in helping the case get solved) 
• A points system for relationships with people (saying certain things increase other people's interest in you romantic/friendship/rivals/neutral)
  • Also maybe make this story focus on the actual case rather than the romance. Some of your players may be Ace or just not that fascinated by romance, so if there's an option to be "really close friends" or "really close lovers", that'd be great.
  • This could also branch out more that depending on player status with the other characters, you can unlock or do certain things to help the case.

• If auto-save is possible, that'd be useful too.
• Depending if you want your players to be able to change their choices or not, create a chapters system so that players can restart at a certain point. 

I know this is only a demo so there aren't many choices yet, but I do see this story working out pretty well when it is completed. Your writing and storytelling is wonderful and I can't wait to read more! Hopefully you do continue writing because I'm not sure if WITNESS is on hiatus or cancelled.